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Mood: Adoration ~sad-jenny Jul 19, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
-sounds sometimes like the underlined word inspired the rest of the verse, "Waiting… Pillows, Beauty, Coffins, Pills" word association games that confuse and disorientate,"drown in the wonder of nothing".
i love the description of ophelia; shtolen :)
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Lol :omg: You're way too kind to me. When I first read your comment I was going 'yeah!' (because I'm a dork) and I didn't get the last bit and than I looked down at the bottom, and thus the :omg: :faint:
:glomp: :hug: :smooch:
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*yournamehere47547375 Jul 19, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
It's beautiful, but I don't really understand it. Is there a story behind it? Either way, it's great.
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Not really. I just wanted to post some of the random poems/prose I've been working on. The underlined words were supposed to seperate them though I tried to order them so they fit together better and it was sort of like listening to someone's thoughts in the middel of their mind.

"Veins that held so much poison
With euphoria, filled and bursting, a soul bloomed
Doubt and thoughts left in an aglow cocoon "

I reused it at the end too because I wanted to use my pretty badness at not so clever metaphors, to show the writer was on drugs and thus you know, my almost poety.


:glomp: Thank you for always reading my stuff. It's sort of nice to have someone who'll give me comments and critique when I need it.

You should write more, I miss reading good poetry.
Oh do you have a favorite poet/writer? (I mean off DA x3)
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*yournamehere47547375 Jul 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Oh okay. And it's still poetry, whether it has a story or not. It's pretty good poetry too! Sometimes the fact that it doesn't make sense is what makes it beautiful, in my opion at least.
Thanks for always reading my stuff! :heart: Even though I don't post often. ^^; I'll try to get another poem out of me though.
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~Fairy-of-the-Woods Jul 19, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I like it. The words you use flow nicely, attaching the previous with the next perfectly.

I just didn't understand why you underlined some words..
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:glomp: Whenever I changed subjects a little bit I tried to underline the first word. Lol fail x.o :date:
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~Fairy-of-the-Woods Jul 20, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no, not at all :) :hug:
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